Days of the season ,seasons of the day (it is autumm)
It is Autumn, the years afternoon
the leaves darken to red as do the rays of the setting sun
leaves fall to the ground
as the sun falls below the horizon
the winds grow colder in this season as the temperature does nearing a day's dusk
all the seasons of a year are as the seasons of the day
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Spring is the morning of nuances and life,
frost lifts away and releases the newly awakened and the newly born.
Summer is the noon as the sun rises to it's pinnacle,endowing unforgiving heat upon the heads of the living
as it teaches us the harshness of life.
Autumn is of course the afternoon,the time when all harvest and prepare
for the sun's annual abandonment of us as the final trial of the year
Winter is the deathly white night,when many make a stand against it's fangs
in the fight for survival, while others hide, slumber and pray to wake up in the new morning.
STINGer-
bees,wasps, and scorpions have stingers
and any poisonous sting is bad,but the worst sting
is the sting from the human organism
the human stinger is the tongue
the venom is lies
the toxin is insults
and like any stinger that stings to death
it must be cut away.
yet another saying on 11-18-08
~The forward path~
the path to one mans future
is paved by the footprints
from all of mankinds past
*treeFall*
if a tree falls in the forest
and nobody's there, does it make a sound?
Yes
and the people who loved and cherished it will hear it fall.
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that was the idea... I'm working on a lot of stuff soI decided to give out the expressions instead of complete works.
I was hoping that cutting to the chase of these themes was the best way but it seems it wasn't for everyone...
thank you for reviewing!!!
I think that your concept is a bit ...to much of it....this doesn't belong to poetry for its style...
I mean, this ruins your rhythm totally...actually there isn't any rhythm...
This whole thing is just a collection of great ideas who must be attached to something else so it can make sense...